I rely a little too much on pointing terms I think. I need to be more careful when I am using them because some of my subjects get lost in the pronouns making the sentence a little confusing for the reader. If I reword or restate the subject in the sentence I can help clarify my meaning for the reader. I don't think I rely enough on transitioning words so to speak. I think that I do transcend somewhat okay from the previous paragraph or previous thoughts. I think that I need to use more of the words for transcending in my transitions. That will make the transition even more clear and smoother.
One of my paragraphs I start three sentences in a row with My. I definitely need to change this. One reason is because it is repetitive and does not have any variety to those three sentences in the paragraph. After reading the paragraph I realize it sounds bad. I need to move the words in the sentence around or look for another way of using 'my'.
It would hurt to 'repeat myself with a difference' a little bit more as well. If I can add some more variety of the way I transcend ideas and thoughts it will make my paper more effective. I can do this by using synonyms and antonyms of words that I need to repeat and also enhance details where needed.
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